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“Dońa Norma”
I once met a wonderful young woman with her pre-adolescent daughter in the doctor’s office. We started talking like everyone does in this kind of places. She mentioned the reason she was there; her daughter was experienced her first period at the age of 8 years and was very scared, because her classmates were making fun of her. While she told me the story, her eyes were filled with tears and she mentioned “the story repeats once again”. That’s when she told me this:
“Alone playing with her only dolls, Isabel was celebrating her 10th birthday, which no one had remembered. Her parents passed away when she was only 6 months old. Since then she encountered living with her long-distance mother’s aunt Gertrude.
Gertrude never married, neither had the privilege of being a mother. Gertrude was 60 years old when she became the tutor of Isabel. As a child, Gertrude was very interested, but all of her questionings were forbidden. That experience made her a frigid, crude woman and never cared to show love for Isabel.
Isabel was a brilliant child since she was born and always had a question for everything surrounding her and her aunt Gertrude refused to answer her questions. The lifestyle of Isabel turned her in a timid and reserved girl at a very short age.
She was starting the fifth grade and since a few years before, became an outcast always with the only doll she had since she was a baby. Isabel started to feel what she called “funny feelings”, but as usual she wasn’t aware of the cause of those “funny feelings”. One day at school, a boy smiled at her, while handing a paper. Isabel began to feel the ‘funny feelings” again, but this time those feelings were increasing.
Isabel was a quiet girl and only crossed limited words with the girls of her grade, but decided to ask them if they were experienced those “funny feelings” too or had felt them. The girls told her “boys are disgusting and stupid” followed by the traditional “eww”. The girls also told her that she probably had a “tummy ache” and that she was weird, followed by the traditional “eww”.
Later that day, Isabel was sitting on a couch inside the little girl’s room, where she spends all of the recess time. When recess was over, Isabel left the little girl’s room; the girls were also leaving the little girl’s room, when they saw on the couch what they called “the biggest spot of the world”, followed by the traditional “eww”.
The girls started to make fun of her, saying that the curse of “Dońa Norma” had visited her. But Isabel was confused and didn’t know this so called the curse of “Dońa Norma”.
Since that morning, Isabel wasn’t the same. She was one of the girls that started to mature at an early age. She began to think differently of all the other girls in her grade. She became more of an outcast and everyone called her “Dońa Isabel, la sangrona”.
A year passed and Isabel was on the sixth grade. Until then everyone still called her the same way. One day, two other girls began to scream because the curse of “Dońa Norma” had also visited them. Isabel instead of laughing, followed by the traditional “eww”, she was prepared and more mature than most of them and helped them, even though, they’ve made her life miserable.”
After the story, I could understand her young daughter’s pain and asked my daughters if they had any questions about the so-called the curse of “Dońa Norma”.
"Dońa" means "Mrs." and Norma is a name in spanish!
Paz & Amor!